oh i'm so relieved to hear about yfandes! (also yesss i so want to see an exploration of companion programming overriding a companion's actual personality--fandes is stubborn and loves van to a fault, but i could totally see companion compulsions getting in the way of that) their relationship is one of the ones most central to the original story and i really want to see yfandes getting as worked up about godly involvement in their lives as van is (and i think she would given time)
oh savil is going to be so immeasurably pissed (also she's going to blame herself so much. poor savil)
i noticed the arrows parallels! dara reminded me of talia at first blush, and ofc stef getting almost killed by bullies--i really liked that inclusion.
i thought stef and van's interactions were very natural. stef has the hero-worship crush on him he does in canon, and he's still too young to be attractive to van, so van is more platonically concerned at this point in time, but still feels drawn to him. stef and van's connection also feels natural in that despite the hero worship, stef doesn't carry the baggage for van that van's other friends do
i liked how you highlighted how need wasn't detecting any women in crisis among the tayledras--helps to establish how different valdemar and the tayledras really are.
i'd love to see more of jisa and van's relationship! i really really loved the scene where jisa first accidentally uses mindhealing on him--i suspect van's mind looks nuts to a mindhealer and we got descriptions of many of the other characters' minds, but not his.
jisa is also one of my favorite characters, and i'm glad we're going to see more of her! (my favorite aspect of her tbh is that she's such a sweet person but she definitely inherited van's stubborn streak lmao)
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Date: 2018-08-05 02:23 pm (UTC)oh savil is going to be so immeasurably pissed (also she's going to blame herself so much. poor savil)
i noticed the arrows parallels! dara reminded me of talia at first blush, and ofc stef getting almost killed by bullies--i really liked that inclusion.
i thought stef and van's interactions were very natural. stef has the hero-worship crush on him he does in canon, and he's still too young to be attractive to van, so van is more platonically concerned at this point in time, but still feels drawn to him. stef and van's connection also feels natural in that despite the hero worship, stef doesn't carry the baggage for van that van's other friends do
i liked how you highlighted how need wasn't detecting any women in crisis among the tayledras--helps to establish how different valdemar and the tayledras really are.
i'd love to see more of jisa and van's relationship! i really really loved the scene where jisa first accidentally uses mindhealing on him--i suspect van's mind looks nuts to a mindhealer and we got descriptions of many of the other characters' minds, but not his.
jisa is also one of my favorite characters, and i'm glad we're going to see more of her! (my favorite aspect of her tbh is that she's such a sweet person but she definitely inherited van's stubborn streak lmao)
aaaah i can't wait for the next part! :)